Fri Feb 02, 2007 10:22 am
_ei wrote:VirtualMetal wrote:_ei wrote:It does depend on which member of staff reads it though, I've had one piece rejected a few times for "too many good entries" and then again for "being too broad". Meh.
It's allways the same person. She probably noticed it wasn't right later.
Oooh I didn't know that, that's interesting to know.
The current NT editor is Darcy, aka Droplet (not her Neo name). She is the third full-time editor of the NT.
Fri Feb 02, 2007 4:42 pm
patjade wrote:The current NT editor is Darcy, aka Droplet (not her Neo name). She is the third full-time editor of the NT.
Aye, and she's fab. =)
Fri Feb 02, 2007 5:22 pm
Your Neopian Times submission (He wasn't always blind) was rejected because your submission was found to have significant punctuation errors or would require too much reformatting. We suggest asking someone else to look over your submission to make sure you are using proper punctuation, such as commas, periods, and quotation marks. Please separate each character's spoken words into a new paragraph.
Thats the message I got today. I'll add my story in a new post, so it doesn't stretch this one out. And if someone can help me with it, I'd greatly apperciate it.
Submission for the Neopian Times
Fri Feb 02, 2007 5:24 pm
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Fri Feb 02, 2007 5:41 pm
Aww, you just seem comma happy. 
For example, that could be "In fact, he was born a blue bori with deep purple eyes."
That's awkward with all those commas, especially that last sentence. Split it up into more than one sentence if you can Maybe something like: "At least, to him it's yelling. All you hear is a bunch of jumbled, incoherent words."
Those are a few of the examples I picked out. I won't go over every one of them. So...I think TNT may have been referring to comma splicing errors...run-on sentences that basically use wayyy too many commas. A good exercise for this would be to read your story out loud, and really *pause* every time you hit a comma. Does it sound weird? If yes, take it out. Another way you could do this is just take every comma out of your story right now, the carefully re-read and add no more than 5 per paragraph or something.
If you need more help feel free to PM me. I only gave it a quick once-over because I'm supposed to be writing a paper of my own.
In fact, he was born a blue bori, with deep purple eyes.
For example, that could be "In fact, he was born a blue bori with deep purple eyes."
As you slowly continue walking up to the Lupe, a small grey faellie comes out of no where, and starts yelling at you, the way -one would assume- faellies do. At least, to him its yelling, what you hear, is a bunch of jumbled incoherent words.
That's awkward with all those commas, especially that last sentence. Split it up into more than one sentence if you can
Maybe something like: "At least, to him it's yelling. All you hear is a bunch of jumbled, incoherent words."
Those are a few of the examples I picked out. I won't go over every one of them.
So...I think TNT may have been referring to comma splicing errors...run-on sentences that basically use wayyy too many commas. A good exercise for this would be to read your story out loud, and really *pause* every time you hit a comma. Does it sound weird? If yes, take it out. Another way you could do this is just take every comma out of your story right now, the carefully re-read and add no more than 5 per paragraph or something.
If you need more help feel free to PM me. I only gave it a quick once-over because I'm supposed to be writing a paper of my own.
Fri Feb 02, 2007 5:51 pm
Thanks. I'll reread it, and take some of the comma's out. I hadn't realised I used that many....
Fri Feb 02, 2007 6:00 pm
Hehe, it becomes many people's bad habit...you'd be surprised. I blame my high school teachers telling us to write more complex sentences. XD
It is a good story, by the way!
Just edit and resubmit, and hopefully they'll accept it.
It is a good story, by the way!
Just edit and resubmit, and hopefully they'll accept it.
Fri Feb 02, 2007 7:21 pm
angisfab wrote:Hehe, it becomes many people's bad habit...you'd be surprised. I blame my high school teachers telling us to write more complex sentences. XD
It is a good story, by the way!
Thanks. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I guess I got so coma happy, cause I recently got done taking my reading pretest {for my GED which I passed ^_^ with a score of 600 something} so the rules the lesson was talking about, kinda stuck in my head.
Sat Feb 03, 2007 4:16 am
You have a problem with tenses, where you switch back and forth between past and present. For instance, you change tenses here: Moon’s smile grew, and to your surprise the small faellie was looking right up at you. A bit hesitant you use your free hand to scratch the small pet under its chin, and Smokey purrs louder. Also(and this was mentioned in the rejection) whenever you change speakers in a conversation, you're supposed to start a new paragraph.
Your eyebrows raised, “Ambrose?” you questioned.
“Oh yes,” Moon said, “Ambrose is Crow’s Tanizard. And Dark, she takes care of the avatar pets. Though she seems quite attached to Harry.” He chuckled, “he’s a pirate Harris.”
Your smile grew, hearing the happiness and joy in Moon’s voice. “Sounds like there’s never a dull moment, in your house” you commented.
“Oh there never is” Moon replied, grinning.
Your eyebrows raised, “Ambrose?” you questioned.
“Oh yes,” Moon said, “Ambrose is Crow’s Tanizard. And Dark, she takes care of the avatar pets. Though she seems quite attached to Harry.” He chuckled, “he’s a pirate Harris.”
Your smile grew, hearing the happiness and joy in Moon’s voice. “Sounds like there’s never a dull moment, in your house” you commented.
“Oh there never is” Moon replied, grinning.
Sat Feb 03, 2007 7:47 am
Try sending it in right after this issue comes out so that it's among the first to be read. That way, there's less of a chance they've already picked all the entries they can fit.
Sat Feb 03, 2007 2:17 pm
I'm on vacation right now but will be back tomorrow (*sad*) and will sit down to format.
=) My favorite job in the world, I love doing that sort of stuff.
=) My favorite job in the world, I love doing that sort of stuff.
Sat Feb 03, 2007 2:19 pm
psyco_chick32 wrote:I'm on vacation right now but will be back tomorrow (*sad*) and will sit down to format.
=) My favorite job in the world, I love doing that sort of stuff.
Thanks. I'll tweak it a bit this week, and enter it as soon as the newest issue of the times comes out.
I also resubmitted my comic. I hope I can get in.
Tue Feb 06, 2007 9:18 pm
I've had about three of my short stories rejected and was always told that they still had my entry for next week, and of course nothing happens. I stopped caring about the NT.
Tue Feb 06, 2007 9:35 pm
I must caution you against posting stories in forums that everybody can see, like on PPT. Dishonest people have been known to steal the stories and submit them for themselves.
It's terrible, but it does happen
It's terrible, but it does happen
Wed Feb 07, 2007 4:15 am
stampsyne wrote:I must caution you against posting stories in forums that everybody can see, like on PPT. Dishonest people have been known to steal the stories and submit them for themselves.
It's terrible, but it does happen
Oh thanks hun. I deleted it.
If anyone wants to see it, I will send it to you in a PM. Just message me and let me know.